...dudes...
..um.......I don't know how to say this...but..um...ya'll NEED to edit betta'...I was attempting to read the piece by Cix (& it is imaginative & all the good things I could say, not to descriptive, but still vivid)...there are a large number of grammatical errors, & some semantic breaks (wrong words for usage).
..."princes" should have apostrophe...
..in a church or a temple, we prAy (not prey, we leave that to the dirty Catholics, right?)...
...god, in Perfect god, should really be caps, it is a proper noun...
...a Tomb is where you put dead peoples, a Tome is a big ass book you might read in a monastery or at my house...
(Yeah, I know the last on is fairly stringent grammar on my part...but I notice these things, 'cause I read allot of dusty old books with the English from England of about an-hundred years ago...& more.)
I out of Love & a Will to see my friends & acquaintances look as good as they can... LUVZYOUZ!