Poem

[screamwhispers9]

Sucked into this spiral tunnel

traps overhead

and snakes to the side

past lives ahead

open your legs wide

spit out into this vaccum

swaying side to side

breathing fire and turbulance

your baby just died

fingers ricocheting

twisting like passion

like fear

lights glaring

no dammit

father put down your beer

cement filled eyes

skin despised

a cemetary thing

angel with lead wings

am i making scarey sounds?

traps overhead

and snakes to the side

past lives ahead

open your legs wide

((Me))

[torn asunder]

wow, really interesting! i need to read it again to get a better feel for it, but it really caught my attention! =)

[Lanaia]

Sucked into this spiral tunnel

traps overhead

and snakes to the side

past lives ahead

open your legs wide

spit out into this vaccum

swaying side to side

breathing fire and turbulance

your baby just died

fingers ricocheting

twisting like passion

like fear

lights glaring

no dammit

father put down your beer

cement filled eyes

Very original and creative! VERY well done!

skin despised

a cemetary thing

angel with lead wings

am i making scarey sounds?

traps overhead

and snakes to the side

past lives ahead

open your legs wide

((Me))

[maeve]

Sucked into this spiral tunnel

traps overhead

and snakes to the side

past lives ahead

open your legs wide

spit out into this vaccum

swaying side to side

breathing fire and turbulance

your baby just died

fingers ricocheting

twisting like passion

like fear

lights glaring

no dammit

father put down your beer

cement filled eyes

skin despised

a cemetary thing

angel with lead wings

am i making scarey sounds?

traps overhead

and snakes to the side

past lives ahead

open your legs wide

((Me))

Very nice work. I was wondering if the number of lines in each stanza and the rhyming pattern were deliberate?

[Gothmama25]

I just met a trouser snake and it was awesome. Plus I did all that.

[LuluVox]

I just met a trouser snake and it was awesome. Plus I did all that.

Did all what?