Sooth's Sloan book

[torn asunder]

OP? if you're referring to the user who first posted this, they are still active on the board, (with another ID) and therefore can still glean some information from anything posted in response to this...

[BrassFusion]

damn, really??

ok, sooth, if you're out there, you write well and I commend your motivation, but your organization should probably be addressed. I love sloan, and I'd love to read a book about sloan, and some back story about halifax would be ok, but only as it related to the topic of the book overall. it looks like what you have is an introduction. introductions (as well as conclusions) should generally be concise and very closely related to the topic at hand. save highly detailed parts for the middle of chapters that are specifically designated. for instance, an early chapter in your book could be, "The Birth of Rock In Halifax," and you could describe the city's atmosphere and how that brought about the softcore punk canada pop style. shipwrecks don't really have anything to do with any of that, however. and certainly not in an introduction.

have you ever written with an outline? it's great for research papers, essays, and larger non-fiction works. it allows you to structure chapters and paragraphs like nesting dolls- each idea under the larger umbrella of a topic under the umbrella of another topic. outlines are very helpful when they're done carefully. i know i didn't describe it too well, but that's what google is for, and i'm far too lazy to be a REAL writer.