Nevar (5) Posted July 1, 2007 Report Share Posted July 1, 2007 INNER DEMON as i walk upon the shadows, comes to mind what moves to follow, hollow shapes i can't escape, a timing fate derived by hate, i think to deep i walk to far, i'm to far in to see a star, don't think it's cool to be a fool, it's just to cruel to be a tool, as i walk to what i found, shadows lurking all around, in the end i'm not a fan, of what i found inside my hand. this is just a peice of one of my songs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BrassFusion Posted July 1, 2007 Report Share Posted July 1, 2007 it's pretty good... if you're disenchanted with your poetry, you could practice by drastically changing up your style. a good way to do that is by writing free verse. you can always turn a free verse poem into one that rhymes later, anyway. but if you completely abandon rhythm and rhyme you're forced to rely on imagery, and that's the heart of poetry rather than your rhyme scheme. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nevar (5) Posted July 1, 2007 Author Report Share Posted July 1, 2007 NO EQUAL I SEE YOU NOT AS MY EQUAL, NO GREATER OR LESSER, I SEE YOU AS NOTHING, NOT A FREIND NOR AN ENEMY, I GAIN NO SATISFATION FROM YOUR DEMISE, NOR DO I HAVE REMORSE, AS WE ARE LIVING WE ARE DYING, THERE IS NOTHING IN MY WAY, AS WE ARE BORN ALONE, WE WILL DIE ALONE, BECAUSE IN MY MIND, YOU DON'T EXIST, Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nevar (5) Posted July 2, 2007 Author Report Share Posted July 2, 2007 I started writing lyrics when i was 15, i had a couple bands, wrote for freinds, or just for the hell of it, i never took poetry in school it just recently became of intrest, NO EQUAL was my first when i was 20, it's not something i take to seriosly, but it's a great way to tell a story without so many words. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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