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[Cometissa E]

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E. Jewell

"Can the roses scream? Can the roses fear?

Can the icy fucking moonlight fucking moan?

What happens when I touch my serpentine tongue here....

You like it when my fingers press your bone."

Oh, look at those stars, they dance like fucking lights!

Please stop it now before my mind implodes!

And so the sun comes, to kill a thousand nights,

Until that golden bastard just explodes.

And I'll cry, and I'll cry, so please babe kiss me now,

Before this sand falls smoothly through my fingers.

The moonlight, she stretches nude and pale upon my brow,

And the cloying sugared scent of sun still lingers.

But please, oh love please, can your tongue reach to my soul?

Can your eyes burn a toxic bloody path?

Can you salivate, such honey, into that empty hole,

Can you enflame my sweetest passion and my wrath?

These fucking shining stars, they're witness to it all,

And the moon (that harlot) just another lover.

And now the sky is melting, oh please don't let me fall,

Just hold me while we smoothly, gently hover...

"You love these lips that kiss you, the teeth that make you lusty,

You adore the ways that I can make you moan?

Alas my eyes are deadened, alas my touch is dusty,

Love you're in your bedroom.... all alone."

[Troy Spiral (13)]

I'd need to decide what my poem-naming philosophy would be in this case. Should it be a summary of the "point" of the poem? Just something eye-catching? Both?

Sometimes poems have names that are a key to understanding the content of the poem , that would otherwise be impossible without additional info. Emily Dickinson was famous for somewhat ambiguous poetry verse that without the title, would be near impossible to decipher.

This poem seems to have 3 separate points.

Its defeintly good though. =)

[Cometissa E]

I'd need to decide what my poem-naming philosophy would be in this case. Should it be a summary of the "point" of the poem? Just something eye-catching? Both?

Sometimes poems have names that are a key to understanding the content of the poem , that would otherwise be impossible without additional info. Emily Dickinson was famous for somewhat ambiguous poetry verse that without the title, would be near impossible to decipher.

This poem seems to have 3 separate points.

Its defeintly good though. =)

I want something eye catching, absolutely.... that at the same time gives the right feeling, without giving away the shocking ending to the poem. My original title was 'Passion is Above You'. It gives the right feeling, buts its such a dull title and for once I'm at a loss. So anyone that can help, please do so.