deathfearsnone Posted September 5, 2009 Report Share Posted September 5, 2009 (edited) i'm working on a book called bloodlust this is the beginning My life sucks. Ever since I was born, my life has been nothing but heart ache. My mother and father died in a car crash when I was 5. Some people say that I was lucky to have been thrown from the car; I don't think they're right. That was the first time I saw an angel. The air was cold. The sky lit up with the small snowflakes falling upon my body. My head hit the hard pavement with a thud. As I started to slip out of consciousness a calming feeling quickly swept over me. Am I dying I thought to myself. A beautiful woman came out of the snow covered street approaching me. Her beautiful figure with wings attached to her back just confirmed my suspicions of being dead. She was dressed in a green and black dress with a golden crown she spoke softly but I will never forget the words she spoke. You are my child it is not your time to go my son. Seek the answers in this life and you will be come across challenges that you will overcome. She kissed the top of my head and disappeared. I was in so much pain I thought I'd die on this stretch of road. With tons of questions, who was this strange woman? Why did she call me her child? A thousand things passing through my head until darkness swept over me. Edited September 5, 2009 by deathfearsnone Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fidget(+) Posted September 5, 2009 Report Share Posted September 5, 2009 I must know who she is...please continue. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheLordOfSins Posted September 23, 2009 Report Share Posted September 23, 2009 Very discriptive! I'd enjoy reading more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
deathfearsnone Posted September 23, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 23, 2009 (edited) Thanks you two here is the next few paragraphs (Keep in mind this is still being edited) Will repost it when its updated Edited January 19, 2010 by deathfearsnone Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
scyko_kitty Posted October 8, 2009 Report Share Posted October 8, 2009 Wow, please post more. It's amazing. I sure Love to read on. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
deathfearsnone Posted December 3, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 3, 2009 finally writers block ended i have rearranged the beginning and here is a website please subscribe on the home page for updates! http://enterbloodlust.webs.com/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BloodCupcake Posted December 7, 2009 Report Share Posted December 7, 2009 Pretty good so far. I like that it takes place right here in Michigan. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheGimp Posted December 10, 2009 Report Share Posted December 10, 2009 i like it I'm working on something to but I'm having writers block meself >.< Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mrs.Heart Posted December 10, 2009 Report Share Posted December 10, 2009 Wow I haven't read something good in a long time.... I like it & want to read more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
deathfearsnone Posted December 10, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 10, 2009 wow thanks guys i got a lab top to revise what I already wrote and making it more detailed here is a revision This is a rough draft after the writing process I will have it edited with punctuation and stuff Where are we going mom? I was 5 at the time the stage of always asking about everything. We are going up to Michigan to see your uncle and Aunt, she said smiling at me with her warm brown eyes and a gleaming smile. I stared out the window watching the snowfall from the sky. It was a very cold wintry day the snowfall was starting to pick up. My dad was driving 15 miles under the speed limit; the road conditions were becoming worse as we crossed into the Michigan border. We will be arriving in an hour and a half my father said. My mother turned around to smile at me but I was starting to fall asleep. I am unsure how long I was asleep for but I was awaken by the horn being honked then the car in front of us started spinning wildly. My dad slammed on the brakes but slid across black ice. Time seemed to slow down to a crawl as we skidded towards the spinning car. An explosion of metal on metal as we hit the other car. The collision threw our car over flipping four times and busting the windows on the car, before it came to a complete stop. I was aware that something was very wrong I felt blood flowing down my face I was from the car. I screamed for my mother and father but there was no answer. The wind whipped around my body the snow mixing with my blood. Time seemed to freeze in that instant, and a beautiful woman appeared. She was dressed in a green and black dress with a golden crown she spoke softly but I will never forget the words she spoke. You are my child it is not your time to go my son. Seek the answers in this life and you will be needed for the things that are to come. She kissed the top of my head and disappeared. I was in so much pain I thought I die right there but a passing car stopped and I slipped into unconsciousness. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mrs.Heart Posted December 10, 2009 Report Share Posted December 10, 2009 wow thanks guys i got a lab top to revise what I already wrote and making it more detailed here is a revision This is a rough draft after the writing process I will have it edited with punctuation and stuff Where are we going mom? I was 5 at the time the stage of always asking about everything. We are going up to Michigan to see your uncle and Aunt, she said smiling at me with her warm brown eyes and a gleaming smile. I stared out the window watching the snowfall from the sky. It was a very cold wintry day the snowfall was starting to pick up. My dad was driving 15 miles under the speed limit; the road conditions were becoming worse as we crossed into the Michigan border. We will be arriving in an hour and a half my father said. My mother turned around to smile at me but I was starting to fall asleep. I am unsure how long I was asleep for but I was awaken by the horn being honked then the car in front of us started spinning wildly. My dad slammed on the brakes but slid across black ice. Time seemed to slow down to a crawl as we skidded towards the spinning car. An explosion of metal on metal as we hit the other car. The collision threw our car over flipping four times and busting the windows on the car, before it came to a complete stop. I was aware that something was very wrong I felt blood flowing down my face I was from the car. I screamed for my mother and father but there was no answer. The wind whipped around my body the snow mixing with my blood. Time seemed to freeze in that instant, and a beautiful woman appeared. She was dressed in a green and black dress with a golden crown she spoke softly but I will never forget the words she spoke. You are my child it is not your time to go my son. Seek the answers in this life and you will be needed for the things that are to come. She kissed the top of my head and disappeared. I was in so much pain I thought I die right there but a passing car stopped and I slipped into unconsciousness. I like that you explained the car crash in more detail. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
scyko_kitty Posted December 17, 2009 Report Share Posted December 17, 2009 just amazing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
deathfearsnone Posted January 19, 2010 Author Report Share Posted January 19, 2010 everything that was posted in post two will be deleted so bare with me now. I have been writing and writing at least a page or two a day well for the last two days i been making sure to sit and type. So with that said i apologize for not updating everyone when i'm done with chapter one i will be generous and post the whole chapter heres the new preface Preface Blood dripped down my lips as I pulled my departed lips from his wrist. He smiled at me and wrapped his big arms around me. He was mine and I was his. He kissed me passionately licking the blood off my lips I moaned in pleasure pressing my body up against his. For that moment, nothing mattered except that I was in love and I could feel that he was indeed also in love with me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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