bean Posted June 26, 2005 Report Share Posted June 26, 2005 Ruby red lips Utter lies. Pleading, yearning - Promising the impossible. Devoted fans carve their name - Willing flesh bleeds their love. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the eternal Posted November 11, 2005 Report Share Posted November 11, 2005 Ruby red lipsUtter lies. Pleading, yearning - Promising the impossible. Devoted fans carve their name - Willing flesh bleeds their love. ooh another good one! I love your endings. can always count on those to give an extra punch Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bean Posted November 11, 2005 Author Report Share Posted November 11, 2005 Thanks! That's funny, I always thought my endings were weak. Maybe not? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the eternal Posted November 11, 2005 Report Share Posted November 11, 2005 your endings are often blunt and take a turn somewhere the poem wasnt quite going I like the way it shakes things up Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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